“I can see your confidence growing and there are some improvements in this assignment since you first sent it to me in November 2013.
In the work you have sent there are examples of you trusting the process of drawing more but often you are still trying to make pictures rather use drawing to investigate what you see.
In the next assignment try and build on the improvements in the two assignment pieces, the exploration and aliveness of the preparatory line drawing and the accurate observation and description of form in the tonal drawing.
Now I can see more competence in your drawing it is time to encourage you to take a leap and be braver with your materials. For example, in the turquoise preparatory drawing, aside from the colour, there is some interesting mark making in the bedding, when you mix wet and dry materials and where you have used different kinds of line on top of each other. In the background the combination of line, wash and rubbing is effective.
be more robust apply greater pressure(with a 5B pencil) probably on a larger sheet of paper.
I especially like the way you have drawn the foot, strong lines and sketchy marks, leaving some areas for our imagination, and the fluid treatment of the object the foot is resting on. Build on this.
A good example of experimentation. Do a lot more of this.
You have taken on advice about paying more attention to tone and negative shapes to help define form. I recommend you use softer pencils and charcoal more often. These softer materials will help you get a more tactile sense of the objects you draw, imagine you are touching or stroking them. I would also like to see you covering your paper I charcoal and using an eraser to search out the form.
watch out for very dominant lines that unbalance the drawing.
Feedback on assignment
Neither of your drawings showed evidence of strong directional light, this is a shame because it would have given you more contrast and definition to play with.
I am pleased to see that in both drawings you show more confidence about using the whole sheet of paper, by bringing in the background to make it an active part of the drawing.
Line : In the preparatory drawing you have used line expressively to show different surfaces and the direction of the marks describes the clothing more convincingly than in the final drawing. Overall it is more successful, including the Inaccuracies you have addressed, which give it life.
<" Tone : This drawing shows the benefit of your time spent looking. Well done on your sensitive use of tone in this drawing, the folds and creases in the clothes and well noticed and carefully drawn. It is a shame that the bottom of the jeans left leg has a straight edge, this makes it look flat, and you’ve drawn foot as a flat object as well. I wonder what happened here?
Your proportions are improved since your first go at the assignment, and from the preparatory drawings sent in this time, there is definitely a convincing body under the clothing. The open areas in the lower right-hand quarter contrast well with the more dense and detailed upper left-hand quarter. I would have given more space above the model’s head, it’s a little tight there.
Much more experimentation with materials, especially charcoal and wet media.
Try collage to increase your understanding of colour relationships and to play with composition. You can also use collage to explore different textures.
Go back through the course handbook and review the examples of drawings reading the projects and exercises at the same time.
Look again at Van Gogh’s variations in mark making, at Seurat’s and Odilin Redon’s use of tone.
Look at the use of line in on page 109 in Colin Press’s figure drawing and page 117 in Phil Steer’s figure drawing.
I understand your aim is to go for formal assessment in July 2014. From the work you have shown in this assignment you have demonstrated your ability to make improvements in your work. You will need to make more improvements before you going for assessment. If you review your course work, read my comments in the assignment reports and redo or rework some of the earlier drawings then you have the potential to succeed at assessment.
Things to pay attention to:
More experimentation with a wider range of materials.
Take time and look closely, draw what you see not what you think you know is there.
Try spending more time looking than drawing, and try drawing whilst looking at the objects and not looking at the paper.
Think about touching what you draw, try to imagine the physical properties of objects, the surface and the weight. .
Don’t over-draw lines, avoid excessive outlining or contouring.
Use lines of different weight, length and breadth and apply them with different kinds of energy.
Increase the range of tones you use, aim for some very dark darks.